I just wanted to ask you a huge favour ( like seriously huge) if we could have camp every year?
If we could go on a new camp every year I would love that because we could make new friendships. That is great for our learning because we will always have our friends there to help and support me. On the camp that we went on just a few weeks ago I made friends with Telaina and Emma and they great friends to me.
At camp it is a great learning experience because we get to try new and different foods and experience a different live style.
This years camp was so fun because I got to try new activities like rafting and rifles and those were super awesome. Going to the beach was a blast especially swimming with Gaby in the sea and watching all the tiny fish float over the waves.
I hope that this note has persuaded you enough that you will let us have a school camp every year.
Feedback/Feedforward: Very persuasive writing Hannah if I were David I would say we could have a camp every year because your story was very persuasive. Next time you could try and put more juicy words in but other then that it was awesome. - Hannah G
Evaluation: I think that putting the whole letter together with a little help was easy but picking the three main topics and and knowing where to put everything was a bit of a challenge for me but I think that over time it will get a bit easier.